Somewhere among
the piles of words
we've strewn
across the room
like dirty clothes
worn out, wrinkled—
stained—
the Love Letters lie:
spoiled sonnets hopeful
in a sea of discontent;
and I watch you,
dagger-gleaming eyes
guarding a
wellspring
of tears rescind.
I'm always so sorry,
and you won't tell me
what you're really thinking,
behind those words.
We've forgotten the love
we used to write—
(it was me who
held your hand then
did you forget?)
(did I forget?)
—in verses
thousands of lines
long;
perfumed parchment,
love-looped handwriting,
sealed with a kiss
that has faded
as the ink has.
That wordlove is crumpled, now
these verses
among our piles.















Comments
The writing, amazingly enough, reminds me of Stephen King. During some abstract scenes he can have an almost poetic air about his writings. It was the way you used the parentheses in this that finalized the connection in my mind.
That parenthese part is my favorate part in the poem: the way her thoughts interject a crucial idea in the middle of an otherwise simple sentance.
Man I love you poetry.
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I'm glad you like eet, really. I heart getting comments from j00. ^___^ And that connection to Mr. King is cool. I haven't read much of him, but in what I have read, I've made that discovery myself. He can be quite poetic at times. Part of his dark charm, I suppose, heehee.
Yes, that parentheses part... Her interjected thought there was just a whim, but I thought it was necessary to convey the idea that the man in this story was not the only one guilty of anything. Much like in real life, though some people never see that.
Anyway... thanks for your kind comment, Meester Beat-Boxer!
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You gave me some good feedback in the IM, actually. I've never been asked that question, and I was waiting for it. Yay you. ^_^
Let's see... Magazine? Okay, sure, I wouldn't mind giving that a go. Date? *blush*
—in verses
thousands of lines
long;
I would make it "in verses of songs a thousand lines long."
But that's just me.
Wonderful!
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